Six Sentence Stories – The Lie, Part 4
“Don’t move!” she growled more than spoke.
Coming from inside the black helmet, her voice was different…harsher, older, and more gravelly than he remembered, but Jack knew with every searing nerve ending in his body that it could only be her.
He thought of the last time he held her and for a moment he imagined that instead of the acrid taste and smell of his own burning flesh, he could taste her mouth, smell her hair, and feel the green damp of the summer grass beneath them cooling the flame of passion on their skin as they lay staring at the sky. He remembered how she threw back her head and laughed out loud when he told her the earth moved every time she kissed him, and of how the sparkle in her laughing eyes turned to terror seconds later when they felt the fateful collision.
“As long as I draw breath,” he had told her, “nothing will keep me from you.”
As he took what he knew might very well be his final breaths, he turned slowly to face her, praying she would recognize him.
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This has been a Six Sentence Story.
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This week’s prompt was DRAW.
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Lisa A. Listwa is a self-employed writer with experience in education, publishing, and the martial arts. Believing there was more to life than punching someone else’s time clock and inspired by the words of Henry David Thoreau, she traded her life as a high school educator for a life as a writer and hasn’t looked back. She is mother to one glorious handful of a daughter, wife to the nicest guy on the planet, and reluctant but devoted owner of three Rotten Cats. You can find her adventures and thoughts on living life deliberately here on the blog.
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Aw cmon! I want the rest! Awesome!!!!! I hear this week is FORTY six sentences…. No really….
Haha, nope! Patience, woman! 😀 Maybe I’ll just make you wait to read the book…
(lol)
Yeah, I lol’ed, too, because she’s not getting forty more…today, anyway.
What a great atmosphere you build up in this chapter. This is the way to tell a story with the reader craving for more.
Oh yay! Thanks for that, Old Egg. I really didn’t know if I felt this one was doing the job.
You’ve drawn me in, i hope she does recognize him!
What if it’s a BAD thing that she recognizes him…? 😉
Yep, Ivy’s right. 46 sentences this week, *taps fingers*… we’re waiting 😉
Great stuff, Lisa.
You all are so funny with your impatience…
Thanks, Kimmie.
Wow! All that emotion with just six sentences! Way to go! Off to catch up!
I really love this challenge of only six sentences. I think I’m getting carried away!
You’ve got one long sentence in there! I love to read these shorts and I have a friend who does them so well. I liked this, too.
I usually try to be much more like Hemingway, Carol – the long sentence is generally not my style. Given my six sentence limitation, though, it had to be done.
I think in the re-working of this (because I’m certain this will be turned into something larger now) I’ll probably chop that baby right up! 😀 Or maybe not…
The six-sentence (at a time) novel! I guess I’ll have to stay tuned. 🙂
Haha – that’s one way to do it, I suppose! 😀
god! is reality starting to influence near-reality? the pace of the (objective) world is being felt in the art of the (virtual) world.
love the story so far, like listening to 12 bars of a song, enjoyable and! instructive
The question is, I suppose, what’s the reality? And what’s the near-reality? And what is the virtual reality?
I kind of love this story, too, and I have no idea where it’s coming from. I only did the first one on a dare from my Husband. 😀
Ohhhh this is GORGEOUS and YES! I loved it and am SO GLAD you came back with another chapter 😀
I had no intention of doing one every single week (and still don’t) but the prompt absolutely worked for me so I went with it. Now when I turn this into a book you all will have read everything. 😀
Oh but it will pad out, surely? There’s more to this story than we’ve seen 🙂
It seems so. And more than I realized.
I really liked this chapter, it adds a whole new dimension to the story. I must admit that’s hard to wait for next week to continue on, but it does keep me returning for the updates!
I couldn’t help it…just had to add a little tension to the tale. Well, not like poor Jack doesn’t have enough to handle with the burning flesh and insufficient atmosphere and all.
I’m enjoying them a bit at a time. I know it’s clearly an unpopular view – but it’s like a gift once a week to look forward to. And it gives me more time to wonder what’s next.
Awesome. 🙂
Ah, the cool green grass beneath them provides just the right respite from the intense, cataclysmic setting. Bravo, Lisa.
Indeed it does, Val, even though that grass is a world away from them, now…
HOOKED.
YESSS! I love that you’re hooked.