Six Sentence Stories – The Lie, Part 6
Andie sat next to the makeshift cot listening to Jack’s labored breathing as her thoughts wandered to their first meeting…
She stood on the stoop looking from the address on the paper in her hands to the number on the door, her hair sticking in wet strands of what used to be ringlets around her face, her green raincoat untied and hanging open such that it provided little to no real protection from the falling rain. This had better be the right place, she thought as she dropped the knocker against the door.
“This had better be important!” he roared as he tore open the door and towered over her. Overwhelmed by his presence, she withdrew her hand and started: “I-I’m Andie. I’m here to…”
Jack’s pain-filled stirring yanked her back into the present and she whispered, “I-I’m here, Jack, I’m here…”
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More here in The Lie, Part 7 and The Lie, Parts 8-11.
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This has been a Six Sentence Story.
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This week’s prompt was ADDRESS.
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This is such a nightmare! I shall probably have disturbed dreams tonight.
OH no! Well, Old Egg, that was not my intent. But I suppose it’s a good thing if the words stay with you… 🙂
This looks like fun Lisa. Very creative. Too creative for me at the moment but I’ll be back!
Thanks, Shirley! These six sentence stories are great fun. At first, I said, “I can’t do that and I certainly can’t do fiction.” Turns out it’s been a great way to stretch the writing muscles. Do come back!
WOW!…again. … With ref to your last comment, my dear Lisa, you absolutely can do fiction… abso-blooming-lutely! …
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Thanks, Kimmie. <3
These are always so great. You had me locked in all the way.
Thank you, Sandy!
Intriguing! You have a book in the making here.
Thanks, Marcia! I am definitely considering it.
Hmmmm. Not where i expected to go….well done!
Really. You’ll have to tell me what you were thinking.
Boy am I glad I found this today. I’ve been wondering what happened. Of course…now I’m wondering what’s going to happen…
Ha…good! I’m so glad it has you hooked.
Oh, Lisa, you do spin a yarn. You jerked me (and Andie) back into the present in this well-written six. I must know more about he first meeting.
Thanks, Val!
My Hub said the same thing – he thought there wasn’t enough about why she was there, etc. But you know, six sentences…and I wasn’t willing to give up what I had. The image of the green raincoat has been in my mind forever (no idea why). So perhaps we’ll get back to Jack and Andie and how/why they met in another post…
This may take a hundred years, but it will be a best seller.
Paul, you are too sweet to say that. I’m still amazed at how much of this story is emerging. Even more amazed that I wrote the first one on a dare. 😀