Six Sentence Stories – Beneath the Surface
She stretched herself out and waited to feel herself floating, noticing the fading light and the chill of the light breeze skipping across her skin.
She began to sink slowly, the breeze and all sound disappeared as the surface broke, then closed again overhead.
Darkness grew ever closer, rushing up from below to meet her even as she could still see the light above slipping further and further away. Her arms felt light at her sides and her hair floated in delicate tentacles in the space around her head while fragments of scenes from her memory drifted through her mind.
The images passed by and disappeared with the waning light. No longer able to reach the conscious world, she stopped trying, then turned over and welcomed the dark.
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This week’s cue is SINK.
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A dark and rather wet tale. This is so sensitively written, with the acceptance of the inevitable coming through strongly in your final few words.
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Thank you, Keith. What a great compliment.
Wow, Lisa. She seems so peaceful and happy with her decision to succumb, but I wonder about the angst that led up to this scenario. Well written and descriptive.
Maybe she’s just tired…
And…
Really need to know she’s ok!
Check the last picture.
Intense! This was giving me a vey sinking feeling, then at the end I felt like maybe the story wasn’t as grim as I first thought. Please tell us she was sinking into the wonderful comfort of a deep, deep sleep! Like the kind she would awaken from refreshed in the morning?? Good writing!
Thank you, Josie. Perceptive. 😉
Beautiful! Reminds me a little of the story of a scooba diver I read a while ago.
Thank you, Stephanie! And it’s SO good to see you online again.
Ah… such a stunning detailed imagery, Lisa! It was both evocative and somehow peaceful- Often how I release and surrender to sleep too. <3
Thank you, Chris! I find that I fight sleep more often than is probably smart – there’s always one more thing to do, you know? I have to work on allowing myself that peace more often.
Lovely SSS Lisa. I keep thinking about participating, but I never do. I am glad I read this one though. It kind of relates to the whole peace topic too. I think so anyway. I don’t know what you are getting at, what may be underlining this story’s words, but I was moved nonetheless.
Glad it spoke to you, Kerry.
Turning off those fragments of scenes floating in one’s mind as they try to relax and drift off to sleep can be a challenge at times, unless one is absolutely exhausted.
The use of the photos really had me going in a different direction until the end. Nice combination of photos and story.
Thanks, Pat. I agree – very difficult to turn off the mind sometimes.