Six Sentence Stories – The Lie, Parts 8 – 11
Jack had always loved the stars.
From the time he was old enough to look up at the evening sky through an empty toilet paper roll clutched in his hands, all he could imagine was being up there among them and not stuck here on Earth. The night skies offered Jack a place to focus his attention, to imagine and dream, and to escape from his sometimes miserable life.
It wasn’t much of a surprise to anyone when he decided to study astronomy, but after a while, Jack realized it would never be enough. Although he loved his studies, he just couldn’t see himself stuck in a planetarium or a classroom for the rest of his life. Jack decided the theory and standard career was fine for now and immersed himself in learning everything he could about his beloved stars, but what he really wanted was to get in the cockpit of something – anything – that would fly and get him up there among them and away from all of the bullshit he knew down here.
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When he applied for the Academy, Jack never dreamed he’d actually be accepted, but somewhere along the line, when he was concentrating on being anywhere but home, Jack somehow managed to become a serious student and get his act together. Hours spent on homework and at the library were the excuses he made to spend as little time as possible with his so-called family, and they paid off big time when that acceptance letter showed up – his ticket out of there.
He threw himself into his education and training with a genuine excitement that would send him hurtling at top speed through the next few years. No more making excuses just to get away – this was for real, for him, and he needed to make the most of it to compensate for the years of disappointment and failure that characterized his childhood. Jack flew through the ranks to become the youngest astronaut on record and signed on to help manage one of America’s earliest space station living communities.
“There’s a surprise for you, Dad,” he thought. “I managed to accomplish something great and find a way to get as far away from you as possible.”
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Life on the station was exciting and busy and Jack had worked so hard and waited so long to get here. He was motivated, determined, and successful. He was a top scholar, a seasoned pilot, and an eager adventurer. He had won honors and accolades for so many things, was appreciated by so many people, except for one…the only one he had ever wanted to notice and the only one who never did. But that was part of another time, another season of his life and Jack had to shake that off and leave it behind; he was ready to join one of the permanent space communities and get as far away from his past as possible.
Then it all fell apart.
A freak accident left him with two broken legs, a pile of broken dreams, and a severely broken spirit.
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After a long period of physical and mental recovery, he was finally living out the dream he had cultivated. Life on the station was exciting and busy and Jack had plenty to occupy his mind between acclimating to life in space and helping to manage the community.
He never thought about how much he missed Andie, never thought about all the time they had spent dreaming and planning, dancing under the stars with the sounds of the night their only music. He still couldn’t understand how or why she loved him after the way he treated her when she showed up dripping wet for his first physical therapy session; he definitely did not deserve her.
But this…now…this was nothing like life on the station and nothing like the life he imagined all those years ago when he stared up at the twinkling stars from his tent in the backyard. This was the aftermath of broken dreams and a broken world and for the first time in a long time Jack had no idea how to fix any of it.
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Want more? Catch up here.
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Each week, the lovely and talented Ivy Walker hosts a link-up challenging writers to spin a tale in six sentences – no more, no less.
As you can see, this week’s post is far from six sentences. I wanted to play a little catch-up and see if I could incorporate the last several prompts that I’ve missed. I believe I have 24 sentences here, drawn from the last four prompts:
RANK, STAR, SEASON, and FIX.
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Lisa A. Listwa is a self-employed writer with experience in education, publishing, and the martial arts. Believing there was more to life than punching someone else’s time clock and inspired by the words of Henry David Thoreau, she traded her life as a high school educator for a life as a writer and hasn’t looked back. She is mother to one glorious handful of a daughter, wife to the nicest guy on the planet, and reluctant but devoted owner of three Rotten Cats. You can find her adventures and thoughts on living life deliberately here on the blog.
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Nice use of the prompts
Thanks, Paul. Kept getting behind so I decided to just use them all. Didn’t really want to let go of the drafts.
Great story! It’s fun to write in six sentence bites, isn’t it?
It is…and not. I like the short snippets, but sometimes I just have way more to say and I hate having to cut.
That’s one wY to get around it!!! Haaahaaaaa….
There’s a surprise for you, Dad,” he thought. “I managed to accomplish something great and find a way to get as far away from you as possible.” This has got to be the saddest line ever!
I kept starting them and not finishing, or forgetting to post it…figured I’d just do a dump. 😀
Jack’s a complicated guy with a sad and angry past, apparently.
Nicely done! I’m impressed that you: 1) can write a continuing story based on the weekly prompts, and 2) went back and caught up when you missed a few weeks. (I think both of those things would have been challenging for me to do!)
Thanks, Kristi. I never intended to continue the story but it kind of demanded to be told. I keep thinking I may do something more with it outside this page. I kind of love poor old Jack.
“guy with a sad and angry past”
what a great line, even if only in the context of a comment. Liked your Sixes…. another first, mutlti-six (sentence story).
This bloghop of zoe’s do seem to attract the creative types, no?
Well you never know, it may turn up in the book!
What a feast you gave us by catching up with the serial. It must have been very satidfying to fix up the story this way.
Thanks, Old Egg. It was good to clean up the drafts folder!
I’ve played catch-up by combining the prompts, too. Nice job!
Thank you, Deborah. I knew I wasn’t the only one! 😀
I love this backstory on the parts I read previously. I’m very curious about why Jack wanted to get as far away from his father as necessary. And I love the picture of him looking through his pretend telescope made of a TP tube. Well done, Lisa.
This little tale has taken hold and started to run away with me, Val. Jack and his father have some baggage, definitely. You’ll have to wait and find out. 😉
Wow, great way to play catch up! I loved the insight these sections provided, and I am wondering if there is any hope still remaining for Jack and Andie. Truly compelling writing!
There is always hope, Josie… 😉
You have presented a whole new way of doing the Six Sentence Story blog hop. It is kind of like that old game where one person starts a story and then the next person carries on with the story using a certain word they are given. Great job!
Haha! Thanks, Pat. I’m getting pretty attached to these characters so they keep coming back.
I like the way you stockpiled the prompts. I’ll have to remember that for when I get behind. Speaking of which, you got me hooked so now I HAVE to go back and catch up. Great story Lisa.
Thanks, Tony. Glad you like it! This was mostly about having half-finished ones that I never got to link up – it bothered me to leave them hanging. 😀
I haven’t ever taken a stab at fiction writing. Are you going to do the November fiction writing challenge that takes over the internet every year? You should! This story would be worth the time.
The NaNoWriMo thing? I wasn’t going to, but I think I might after all. I definitely have more to offer with this one. And thank you, May! <3
Please tell me you’re making this into a book.
Actually, yes. I just might be.